A poem? what do you think?
The line was drawn,
You ignored it,
So i replaced it sevenfold upon me.
Strawberry gashes bleed me,
A scarlet map of pain.
Find the lines,
Find my veins,
Then cut them with my pain.
Red emotion dripping out
Blood and tears mix again.
That's all i'm worth, this pain.
Slicing flesh
And shredding hearts,
This blackened hell's torn me apart.
But there's beauty in this pain,
Poppies flower at wounds again.
Answer:
I love it!...
Alot of people dont understand these sort of things but this poem goes deep into the explanation!...The way the words express the feelings grab the attention and the emotions of the reader...
And as for the last line it does make sense...It enlightens the ending of the poem in a strange way!
Great poet!...
And i would just like to say that the people who label "self-harmers" as attention seekers are ignorant and extremely narrow minded...These are the people that society shouldnt have time for...
Take care x Stay safe :)
i luv it ooohhh its superb xxxxxxxxx
yeah that confuses me.
*gasp*
i think it's so cool~
so metaphorically written!
great!
I think it's depressing.
What's with all the poems about slicing yourselves?
i love your poem ,, <3.
It is great. A little scary, but if that was what you wanted you accomplished it. You sound a little like Edgar Allan Poe.
You lost me at sevenfold..
Gosh! Are u ok???
I like it but i'm not sure if i get it!
the person tried to give a warning but then they were hurt anyway. they had to be hurt to cleanse themselves of the past. happiness can come from the lessons they learn from pain.
interesting poem. did you write it?
it is so good you should send me more pome often because i like them.
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this is quite a beautiful poem n i think u must get it published
i tell u, people who do not understand your emotions are complete idiots and nothing else
hmm...interesting...it reminds me of cutting. The people who use razor blades to cut veins in their wrists. Supposedly, they do this because their lives feel so empty and meaningless pain is the only thing they have to remind themselves that they are alive. So they would see beauty in pain...that's all I got.
Perhaps:
Skin heals to wound again.
I'm not exactly sure what the question is, but think you are an excellent poet and I understood it completely{I should I started a writing club}if you don't know what it means just think about the true, deeper meaning, what is the poem about and how is it all tied in. It is definatley a great poem.
sounds a bit cleche
what??
It's alright. Lots of references to red, scarlet, gash, bleed, and pain though!!
i like it. if this reflects your own feelings i hope writing helps you overcome pain you have :)
i always find it helps xx
Poppies flower are used to make herion drug of choice for depressed people
most ppl who cut themselves r attention seekers,
there r many ppl out there with real probs. got no time or attention to give to attention seekers
die quietly please
the poem is defiantly in the Edger Alan Poe side of things. The last sentence as you have sad does not quite work for the end. What if you said for pain is replaced with calm, peace.
Something simple and to the point.
In this day an age there are so many kids and adults that cut to hide there pain and emotions (or to deal with them), When you write think about whom you are going to touch with your writing. Bring all of yourself and others around you in to what you are trying to say. I think you will come up with a two sided poem. You have a lot of talent.
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