A poem. What do you think?
On wings so light; an angel's kiss.
Rest upon my hand a while
Don't leave me alone,
Bring me a smile.
You're my ray of light in the darkness,
Where i've become so cold and heartless.
But you have to leave, back to the light,
And leave me here to lose this fight.
Answer:
I like it, i love "dark" poetry! the beginning was like a ray of hope had come and by the end you realized that your ray of hope was gone and you were stuck fighting all alone again... i liked it. i would like to read more of ur poetry if the rest is darker than this one... like i said, i love dark poetry.
ummm it's nice a little dark,but not bad
... its nice ...
/:o you have left me speachless wah wah
mmmmmmmmmmm its iight and that gurl have the same picture azz me huh!
it is too dark for me too ,can you write something to cheer us up and yourself up .
Hello. Liked the composition and syntax. You say you have others? Have you ever thought of publishing?
I do agree with Katie, who says it is a bit dark, because the picture I get when I read it through is of entrapment (as if down a deep dark well) and when that chance for release comes by, it suddenly flits away...
I really like your poem. I don't find it to be dark. It speaks to me of hope. It ends on a sad note, but you never know if that butterfly might come back. Keep it up!
I think it's quite beautiful but sad..not what I'd call THAT deep but definitely sad.the message I get from it is that you're powerless because you're relying on someone else to make you feel fulfilled...just as you thought you were maybe getting somewhere...that hope is taken away from you.
I wondered if this was how you really felt (because when I get poetic it's based on how I feel at that time)
i agree with you this is definitely not dark at all...anyways i really like it, it reminds me of something i would write, you write with the same kind style i do, i really like your word choice...i think that is one of the most important things in poetry and writing...one thing is that because of the rhyming every line it kind of starts to sound sing songy, i'm sure i'm probably just not reading the way you intended it tho... i think it is very good and it gives you a good picture
It's really, REALLY good. I can totally understand the sentiment behind it.
thats exactlly how i feel right now. its a beautiful and wonderfully written poem of how u feel. its always good to express how u feel. when u don t it only hurts u worse.
I think it is beautiful and just good it shows how i think people need each other and don't want to be alone because u cant be happy alone.
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